🚨 STORY DIAGNOSIS
Find out what's really holding your screenplay back.
I'll read your complete screenplay and examine it as a story - not simply give it a score.
I'll look at premise, structure, character, motivation, conflict, stakes, pacing, theme, scenes, dialogue, setups and payoffs, opening, climax and ending.
You'll receive a detailed assessment identifying:
What's working.
What's not working.
Why it's not working.
Where the biggest opportunities are.
🛟 STORY RESCUE (Recommended)
Don't just diagnose it. Rescue it.
I'll read and diagnose your screenplay - then go further by developing a proposed stronger version of the story.
You'll receive a development treatment exploring how the screenplay could be restructured, strengthened or reimagined.
That might mean changing character motivations, moving revelations, restructuring acts, combining characters, creating new sequences, removing unnecessary material, strengthening conflict or developing a completely different approach to the ending.
You're not simply receiving criticism.
You're receiving a roadmap for your next draft.
✍️ SCRIPT POLISH
Good story. Rough draft.
Sometimes the fundamental story works, but the screenplay itself needs tightening.
I'll work directly on the pages to improve areas such as:
Dialogue • Scene construction • Action lines • Pacing • Repetition • Clarity • Character voice • Economy
The objective is to preserve your screenplay while making the writing sharper, cleaner and more effective.
💬 DIALOGUE PUNCH-UP
Make every character sound like a person - not a screenwriter.
I'll work through your dialogue looking for opportunities to make it:
More natural. More concise. More character-specific. More emotionally precise. Funnier where appropriate. Less expositional. More memorable.
The goal isn't simply shorter dialogue.
It's better dialogue.
🔄 SCRIPT REWRITE (Premium Package)
Need more than advice?
For selected projects, Story SOS can take the development work further and actually help rewrite the screenplay.
Depending on the project, this may include:
New scenes • Structural changes • Dialogue rewriting • Character redevelopment • New sequences • Reworked openings/endings • Partial or complete rewrites
Major rewrites begin with an agreed creative direction so you know where the screenplay is going before extensive rewriting begins.
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